to Sail with You

[Jerryk]

Hoboelite,
your poem truly touches the heart. I love those soft, yet powerful images contained in each verse. So very well done. Happy sailing.
Jerry

[dwells]

I don't believe I've ever heard of eating butterflies HE, so that was a real grabber for me. Your technique in this poem is terrific, and the format serves the message superbly. A paen to togetherness; in the embrace of the ocean from which we sprang (or slithered most likely) - cheers my friend! - Dan - always a sucker for a marine theme I am!

[CarolynKleefeld]

Delightfully heartwarming; a gorgeous blend of imagery and emotion, beautifully composed and much enjoyed.

[A.k.ChaosDream]

great vibrant colors to this one
i also liked the style and word choices
cool read
cheers
A.
k

[dwells]

Indeed HE - iambic pentameter - cheers friend! - Dan

[evanlovett]

for me personally, the depth of the interwoven imagery of this piece felt so intimate it brought a life of its own to my mind. you the flare, the rising sun set upon you.... the dance of it all. beautiful write

[Jovel320]

I like the rhyme scheme and tone of this piece. An innocent look at love and how we wish our lives would carry out. Great use of feeling through language. Thanks for your share!!!
Jovel

[Chelle]

I love a good love poem. And one with meter is even better to sink your teeth into. Instead of putting this in the normal cookie jar, you proved to us you have range. You took the normal and made it quite interesting. "we skim the waves of time as sailing wings".....a wonderful line.

[JASON]

hobo, my son this was wonderful !!!
flowed like a waltz - brilliant.

[Sylvierue]

A lovely poem. Your meter is spectacular and adds to the lilt of the poem. It makes me think of spending an afternoon in a hammock with the one you most want to have all to yourself. Great mood created with words.

[linlin528]

Such a beautiful poem!! Like the above have said, your meter and rhythm really makes this spectacular image flow! Really amazing!!

[Mollie]

Oh what a grand love poem! Shakespeare would appreciate this contribution (iambic pentametre) I certainly do. Thank you for sharing with us all.

[Ladywildalice]

Not much I can add to the wonderful comments already heaped upon you for this beautiful write. Congratulations on the Spotlight. It is very deserving of the compliment....and it is a true compliment to be chosen from all the writes on TPS to be highlighted. Excellent job. Much enjoyed.