Dreaming of Existing - Palindrome

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Dreaming of Existing - Palindrome

Post by sparky21737 » April 25th, 2017, 8:54 pm

Dreaming
Asleep I am
Or am I awake?
Night is quiet and still
Shadows lengthen and form stars
Spiraling, spiraling, spiraling

Breathing
Alive I am
Or am I dead?
Morning is coming
I will wake, won’t I?
Waiting, waiting, waiting

I do exist, don’t I?
Questioning, always, questioning
Asleep, awake, alive, dead
Dead, alive, awake, asleep
Questioning, always, questioning
I don’t exist do I?

Waiting, waiting, waiting
I won’t wake will I?
Coming is morning
Dead I am
Or am I alive?
Breathing

Spiraling, spiraling, spiraling
Stars form and lengthen shadows
Still and quiet is night
Awake I am
Or am I asleep?
Dreaming


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Re: Dreaming of Existing - Palindrome

Post by entwife » April 26th, 2017, 11:15 am

very nice. this is a hard form to make work, great job.


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Post by INFPoet » April 27th, 2017, 12:35 am

This is INTRIGUING!!! Well done, my friend (and comrade in the LP Wars)!

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Re: Dreaming of Existing - Palindrome

Post by Alan » April 30th, 2017, 12:55 am

Nice stuff! :D

Palindromes are always really fun to make since - at least in the way I do it - you start with a simple idea on the 'pivot' and then you expand and expand on it. The content revolving around questioning works great for that. Also liked the creative use of punctuation to make the palindrome lines work.



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Re: Dreaming of Existing - Palindrome

Post by astroannie » May 8th, 2017, 9:33 pm

wow! I'm glad I clicked on this. Thank you for sharing with us. It's very well-penned. I especially like stars and shadows juxtaposing. Again, wow!


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Post by SilentTears » October 19th, 2017, 9:55 pm

Love this, love the concept, love the topic. It has this sort of ethereal, dreamy, half-remembered quality I really enjoy. Well deserved and well done Sparky!

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Re: Dreaming of Existing - Palindrome

Post by Josie » October 22nd, 2017, 9:16 pm

Congratulations on the spotlight recognition. I must admit I felt my head was spinning going back and forth. I can tell you had fun writing this.


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Re: Dreaming of Existing - Palindrome

Post by hidekazu inoue » October 23rd, 2017, 4:48 am

Hi!:Sparky
This poem is the origin of Saussure's structural linguistics.sinifant "meaning" and signifié"meaningful" are left to the creativity of the reader.

Thank you for a wonderful work. 


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Post by hidekazu inoue » October 23rd, 2017, 8:47 am

hidekazu inoue wrote:
October 23rd, 2017, 4:48 am
Hi!:Sparky
This poem is the origin of Saussure's structural linguistics.sinifant "meaning" and signifié"meaningful" are left to the creativity of the reader.

Thank you for a wonderful work. 
Yes,this is nice poem style for palindrome.
one more i enjoyed.


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