A clear sky

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sakshi.joshi
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A clear sky

Post by sakshi.joshi » May 9th, 2016, 4:25 pm

And I look and look but find nothing,
It's like staring into a clear blue sky,
You see the vast indefinite space,
Wonder what's behind that,
Wonder if it is just a veil hiding some secrets behind,
You wait and wait for the shield to lift,
But it's just a clear blue sky.



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Re: A clear sky

Post by jfreephilosophy » May 9th, 2016, 5:59 pm

I know what it is to gaze off in the endless blue sky and wander what lies beyond it... what a metaphor...great write.


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Re: A clear sky

Post by Jahaliel » May 11th, 2016, 4:43 am

This is really lovely, thought
provoking in its clear and vivid imagery. I really liked it.


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I loved you then, I love you still though we are shadows of our former glory
Though they try to kill us off, we are a never-ending story


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Re: A clear sky

Post by sakshi.joshi » May 11th, 2016, 11:33 am

Thank you so much JFP and Jahaliel for stopping by :)



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Re: A clear sky

Post by IronHeart » June 1st, 2016, 6:33 pm

Yeah, the sky can be both clear and empty all at once. Interesting write! It is ponderous.


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Re: A clear sky

Post by SilentTears » September 19th, 2017, 8:42 pm

Introspective and relatable. I think we've all looked up and wondered at one point or another in our lives. Interesting piece.


I let the sun on my skin.
Pretend I don't burn
I'm not burning here.
I just lay ash
On my eyelids,
And rub it deep into my
Bones.


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Re: A clear sky

Post by BarryC » September 23rd, 2017, 9:30 am

a sublime piece-deserves the spotlight-well done



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