Twilight

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Moyo
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Twilight

Post by Moyo » June 12th, 2016, 6:32 am

A stare from a crumpled face
as gnarled fingers gently touch mine...

"Don't i know you?"

"Yes.....

..Yes you do Dad"



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Re: Twilight

Post by ramfire » June 16th, 2016, 12:27 pm

A Sad poem to the max. No one wants to lose their father to Alzheimer's disease. It happens, but it's very sad.



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Re: Twilight

Post by mangodog » June 16th, 2016, 6:46 pm

wow, Moyo - powerful stuff....LOVED the brevity.....

MDOG



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Re: Twilight

Post by Moyo » June 18th, 2016, 3:14 am

Thank you guys :) You lose your father twice with Alzheimer's. But its not a personal poem.



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Re: Twilight

Post by Ona Sabela » June 27th, 2016, 12:42 pm

Felt like a punch in the gut
reading that last line even
though I knew it was coming.
Well done!


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Re: Twilight

Post by Moyo » June 28th, 2016, 4:16 am

Thank you for the encouragement.



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Re: Twilight

Post by BarryC » October 18th, 2017, 8:14 am

excellent work-deserves the spotlight



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Re: Twilight

Post by SilentTears » October 19th, 2017, 9:45 pm

Right in the heart. This really kind of shocked me for some reason, I'm not sure why. It's heartbreaking and bittersweet, full of potential, but it will surely continue down the same road. Simple, yet there is so much complexity in a relationship. Short, yet this quick exchange says and explains so many things. Well deserved and well done. Welcome to TPS, I look forward to seeing more of your work.


I let the sun on my skin.
Pretend I don't burn
I'm not burning here.
I just lay ash
On my eyelids,
And rub it deep into my
Bones.


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Re: Twilight

Post by Josie » October 22nd, 2017, 8:44 pm

I liked the brevity and the use of dialogue. The subject matter touches so many families. Congratulations on the spotlight.


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