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Lucidhappens
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No words complete

Post by Lucidhappens » August 5th, 2019, 9:38 pm

Intricacies have linked aloud in proven satire
My word without revenge is subtle in your mind
Subtle in your substance
Weep for our agreement that has no space to grow
Sadness is our oblivion
Sadness not understood
So we weep in arms of each of us
Arms that let go
Arms that let go
Why has our armor betrayed us
Why without each other have we seeped through auburn skies
More beautiful it seems than our weakest moment together
I hate you
I hate you in reverse so to remember our last instant together as our first
Ending us thIs way
Curious of each other’s warmth
virgin to each other’s remorse
Now here we are - sinking -sinking-
with no warmth
No thing
nothing
nothing
No thing left of us to save
So with nothing Stand still
So with nothing I am leaving you



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GlobeTrotterMax
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Post by GlobeTrotterMax » April 23rd, 2020, 4:56 pm

I really enjoyed the wordplay here. This is as sad as it is angry! Thank you for sharing a part of yourself here.


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Post by rupertpupkin » May 23rd, 2020, 11:36 am

Nice write. Sadness and anger closely linked. Many fine lines to admire in this piece. I really enjoyed your poem. Thank you


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Post by rupertpupkin » February 2nd, 2022, 3:18 am

Enjoyed revisiting this wonderful poem. Well done on a most deserving spotlight.


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Post by SirFleshwound » February 4th, 2022, 7:53 pm

Though the subject of your work is reflective and mournful, it seems to portray a certain resolution and resolve at the end that is powerful and hopeful. Love your use of wordplay. Congratulations on your spotlight.

Michael.



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