What Do I See

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SinLoi
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What Do I See

Post by SinLoi » March 16th, 2018, 2:13 pm

I went into the jungle
And what did I see?
Bodies of soldiers, ours and theirs.

I looked from the jungle
And what did I see?
Families of soldiers ours and theirs.

Who are the victims?
Those buried in the ground,
Or those who live with the pain?



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Re: What Do I See

Post by Jovel320 » March 18th, 2018, 9:44 pm

A painful truth and well expressed here. War is a bad word and full of endless pain creating holes in our lives which cannot be filled. Thanks for sharing this!!
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Re: What Do I See

Post by Mike6 » March 21st, 2018, 11:39 am

This is absolutely heart-wrenching. As said by above comment, sadly, this is a truth of many. Very sad poem, great emotions and emotive technique.



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Re: What Do I See

Post by Sasha » March 25th, 2018, 7:21 am

Such a powerful poem!
I so like the subtle change in the first line of the beginning two stnazas, as it creates an effective image in the reader's mind, like people on both sides are dying, suffering and living dreadful times, no one is winning!
I like as well how you ended it with a rhetorical question - striking ending!
Great job!

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Re: What Do I See

Post by testove » March 25th, 2018, 11:59 pm

nice poem here. war man


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Re: What Do I See

Post by rupertpupkin » October 4th, 2018, 4:58 pm

Short yet powerful write and most deserving of a spotlight! Well done with this.


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