THE PALM OF MY HAND

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THE PALM OF MY HAND

Post by Louis Gibbs » May 14th, 2017, 2:45 pm

The palm of my hand …

Lines upon lines,

Shapes and symbols,

With meaning to the Mystic

But a mystery to me …


Only when pressed into yours

Can the magic be revealed.



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Re: THE PALM OF MY HAND

Post by Versus » May 15th, 2017, 9:56 am

I must admit I am clueless as to what you're singing 'bout. Still, your poem sounds great! It really does, whatever it means. Thanks.


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Re: THE PALM OF MY HAND

Post by Louis Gibbs » May 15th, 2017, 12:19 pm

Thanks for your comments, Versus, but if it hasn't been experienced, I'm afraid it is difficult to explain. Sorry.



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Re: THE PALM OF MY HAND

Post by Louis Gibbs » May 15th, 2017, 7:47 pm

If you have held hands with someone you love deeply, palms pressed together and felt the energy flowing between you, then yes, you have experienced the magic. Thanks again for your input.



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Re: THE PALM OF MY HAND

Post by CarolynKleefeld » May 15th, 2017, 8:37 pm

Most cleverly composed, with the mystery and magic succinctly expressed-- much enjoyed Louis.



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Re: THE PALM OF MY HAND

Post by S(OU)LAR » May 15th, 2017, 11:14 pm

"One meets the one. The two makes one as one..."
The world beyond the world begins.
Thanks for sharing.



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Re: THE PALM OF MY HAND

Post by INFPoet » May 16th, 2017, 3:15 pm

Hi Louis Gibbs! This is a very creative poem. When I started it, I had no clue where it was going, but the ending was absolutely perfect. The way you wrote this is amazing - how you combined two separate things and caused the one to impact the other. It felt like at the end of the fifth line, it took a 90 degree turn and flowed effortlessly into the true heart of the poem. Nice work!

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Re: THE PALM OF MY HAND

Post by Louis Gibbs » May 16th, 2017, 5:52 pm

Thank you so much, INFPoet, for your kind review and welcome to TPS. I'm thrilled to have stumbled across this splendid site for sharing poetry! You and the rest of the TPS team please keep up the good work. It means so much to all bards to have an outlet such as this. Kudos!



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Re: THE PALM OF MY HAND

Post by jwesley » July 31st, 2017, 3:06 pm

So short , so simply beautiful, my friend.

j.



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Re: THE PALM OF MY HAND

Post by harric » August 19th, 2017, 7:01 pm

Yes, when you hold your lover's hand as if your lifelines connected to an infinity and there is magic there.😁



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