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wane

Post by The ghost » April 20th, 2017, 6:09 pm

old moons feel no pain

with gravity

life is measured
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Re: wane

Post by ObsidianMule » April 21st, 2017, 12:00 am

Do i measure up?



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Post by The ghost » April 21st, 2017, 9:38 am

I've been reading the back pages.
I have some favorites.
You are one of them.
How about something new?


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Re: wane

Post by The ghost » May 14th, 2017, 1:27 pm

Thanks, Cry Havoc
Much appreciated.
A slight change in the second line
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Re: wane

Post by jainrohit » July 31st, 2017, 10:33 am

A great ode to the unseen aspect of life. This Haiku is really wonderful. Says a lot of things in just a few lines. Great.


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Post by interyeti » August 8th, 2017, 6:23 pm

I loved how the second line interacts with the meaning of both the others---structurally delightful.



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Re: wane

Post by SilentTears » September 26th, 2017, 7:12 pm

Simple, thought provoking and clever.


I let the sun on my skin.
Pretend I don't burn
I'm not burning here.
I just lay ash
On my eyelids,
And rub it deep into my
Bones.


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Re: wane

Post by hidekazu inoue » September 27th, 2017, 12:16 pm

The essence of life is expressed. A wonderful work.


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