Dire, verse two, Rain

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Kornelia
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Dire, verse two, Rain

Post by Kornelia » April 6th, 2017, 1:33 am

Thin sound of clarity when rain starts to fall.
Porcelain droplets clutch at fields and treetops.
Violet solar fingers trace the lines of each reflection.
Dawn awakens us
Almost as if each sound will be formed once more.

It gathers itself as wind strokes through treetops shaking the branches.
Shaking the light from the branches enticing the trees with an aura of cloud.
This curtain of rain travels skies and spheres where broken starlight offers
us knowledge .

It carries the tears of the univere, the sighs of the sun
There is a blueprint of lifelines to follow
Sacred scars anointed with ancient wounds dried in this light

These hemispheres have no name. They are of rotating formation.
Each breath begins again in the stillness of reflection.
All is of sight and of sound
After this stillness, we will learn to speak again

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Re: Dire, verse two, Rain

Post by INFPoet » April 6th, 2017, 2:40 pm

Hmm. Thought-provoking. Has a gentle simpleness to it while at the same time being very profound. The ending two lines are probably my favorite. I like this. Well done.

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Home is behind, the world ahead,
And there are many paths to tread
Through shadows to the edge of night,
Until the stars are all alight...
(J.R.R. Tolkien, LOTR)

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Re: Dire, verse two, Rain

Post by BarryC » April 18th, 2017, 4:56 am

an awesome piece -well done



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Re: Dire, verse two, Rain

Post by tangerinepie » April 18th, 2017, 11:34 pm

Very beautiful, the word choices were brilliant and I felt lifted into many dimensions.The last verse completed the poem perfectly..Adored this piece..Tangie..


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Re: Dire, verse two, Rain

Post by moe » April 19th, 2017, 9:38 am

This piece has a quality that I cannot quite identify something I cannot quite grasp A Je nais sa qua if you will.
I quite enjoyed it however. The word choices were, to say the least, inspired!



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Re: Dire, verse two, Rain

Post by Kornelia » April 19th, 2017, 3:28 pm

Well, this is such astonishing news :-) :-)
I am thrilled and more than pleased that my poem is chosen for the spotlight
This is a series of poems about the eelements of nature. I have often wondered how rain travels through the
atmosphere. How much knowledge it contains. Nature is like a compass to me
Thank you all so far, really appreciate all your feedback and kind words
brightest of greetings
Kornelia


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