Change of Season

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jaievieenrose
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Change of Season

Post by jaievieenrose » September 13th, 2016, 1:27 am

Somewhere the summertime is smiling
while leaves are drifting to rest
It's the feathering of fall
to which the seasons glance in jest.

The clover fields are dancing
as night embitters with frost
Crickets singing out of time
The glow of day is lost.

The moon arose to assuage the night
as daylight scurried away.
The sun, laughing as he hid past the hillside
to set beyond the bay.



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Re: Change of Season

Post by nightseas » September 13th, 2016, 2:28 am

Awesome reflection on nature and the seasons!



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Re: Change of Season

Post by moe » September 13th, 2016, 9:44 am

Gorgeous description of a fall day , my favorite season by the way!



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Re: Change of Season

Post by dwells » September 13th, 2016, 8:58 pm

The penultimate line needs a touch up to avoid tripping the reader as it's read, I believe Jaie; but it might be just me too. An overall enchanting outtake on a phenomenon that never grows old, though we do, sadly. Well done and cheers! - Dan
Perhaps: "The sun hid; laughing, behind the hill" or similar... :thumb:


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Re: Change of Season

Post by rupertpupkin » August 12th, 2020, 9:10 am

Lovely poem. Well done on the spotlight


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Re: Change of Season

Post by The ghost » August 13th, 2020, 10:02 am

Nature does what it does without a thought and all we can do is think about it.
Great wordplay hear well done


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Re: Change of Season

Post by soldierpoet » August 20th, 2020, 9:19 am

Beautiful poem, I love the way you pulled this together! Congrats on the spotlight!


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