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Idyll

Post by created2write » May 20th, 2012, 7:56 pm

Engage me, or better yet, let me engage you
in the outrageous ventures of my mind
come share my soft if hard is your way, let
me sway and swirl you gently

Or if you care to explore; I implore you look
southward with me, can you see what I see?
it’s a honey suckle tree, with bees all abuzz
making honey to mix with pleasure

Smile I’ll do the rest and test your theory of
pessimism with my rainbow wares- I come in
a pair of shes, changing by degrees as the
breeze warrants

I’m only ever heard as a haunting lyric played
on the flute of ancients, a faint but steady
rhythm in the blood that begs to differ
for the sake of knowing

Let me engage you, or you might do the honors
if you wish, as kisses are born of do overs and
shared sunrises that break the dawn
all too soon

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Post by .Nameless. » May 20th, 2012, 11:09 pm

A very nice piece, even if it was a bit profound, as djk said.


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Re: Idyll

Post by created2write » May 21st, 2012, 2:12 pm

djk wrote:You have a profound writing style, and this piece truly delivers!
I am honored by your response. Thank you so much. Peace, V


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Re: Idyll

Post by created2write » May 21st, 2012, 2:15 pm

.Nameless. wrote:A very nice piece, even if it was a bit profound, as djk said.
I am glad you enjoyed and thank you for sharing, I appreciate. Peace


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Post by created2write » May 21st, 2012, 2:17 pm

Street Poet wrote:I really enjoyed this poem, especially how the imagery builds with each stanza. my favorite line is "I come in
a pair of shes, changing by degrees as the breeze warrants" Great job.

Welcome to the Sanctuary and thank you for your kind words. Peace


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Re: Idyll

Post by matches » May 22nd, 2012, 11:20 pm

Hey C2W,

A note to let you know I been here to feast --, and I will return.


until...


"Adversity discourages only an inferior people..."

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the deadliest of poisons to the dreamer."

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Re: Idyll

Post by chowzrus » May 23rd, 2012, 10:28 am

C2W (Vicki?) - Girl, I love it when you knock on my heart like that - makes me miss Love so much -
Thanks for stirring this heart of mine - hope some of my work might do the same for you -
Love, Bill



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Post by newlight » May 23rd, 2012, 10:37 am

made me wish i was in love, xx emma



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Re: Idyll

Post by playerfrost » May 23rd, 2012, 11:31 am

that was awesome, i really can't think of anything that i would do to make it better, the imagery was great and word choice was really good, just a great poem.
"Smile I’ll do the rest and test your theory of
pessimism with my rainbow wares- I come in
a pair of shes, changing by degrees as the
breeze warrants"
I really liked this stanza the best, just very witty and great choice of words.



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Re: Idyll

Post by everhopeful » May 23rd, 2012, 4:11 pm

You had me at "Engage me, or better yet, let me engage you"!
I love it when the playful, seductive C2W side comes out to play, it's a special experience for this reader, and I sense that there is a side to this poem which is made to entice and brighten the day with the superb imagery, which is always closely linked to emotion and seeing new perspective in the world.
Another poem from you which makes me smile from ear to ear.



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Re: Idyll

Post by created2write » May 23rd, 2012, 5:19 pm

matches wrote:Hey C2W,

A note to let you know I been here to feast --, and I will return.


until...
Greg...don't keep me waiting, until...


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Re: Idyll

Post by created2write » May 23rd, 2012, 5:22 pm

Bill, thank you for such a beautiful smile. Makes my heart sing. Peace, V

Newlight, thank you much.

Playerfrost, thank you and welcome to the sanctuary. Looking forward. peace


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Post by created2write » May 23rd, 2012, 5:25 pm

everhopeful wrote:You had me at "Engage me, or better yet, let me engage you"!
I love it when the playful, seductive C2W side comes out to play, it's a special experience for this reader, and I sense that there is a side to this poem which is made to entice and brighten the day with the superb imagery, which is always closely linked to emotion and seeing new perspective in the world.
Another poem from you which makes me smile from ear to ear.
Mick thank you so much, and I hope you know I am always honored all over again by your taking the time to share and respond with such feeling to my work. I'm feeling playful, who knows... :wink:

You make my day. Much love, V


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Post by trell11 » May 24th, 2012, 3:54 am

Very subductive yet lyrical. I like how you go back and forth trying to see who wants to be the initiate. nice writing.


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Post by Coapachy » May 25th, 2012, 4:33 am

Hi my friend. You are such a naughty girl....and I LOVE it! The sensual imagery has me melted, I was going to say melting, but I have already liquidised! As ever, you hold words and flow with such precision and seduction, it feels, like always, such an honour to read you. So bloody sexy may I add! Brilliant.

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Post by created2write » May 25th, 2012, 8:32 am

trell11 wrote:Very subductive yet lyrical. I like how you go back and forth trying to see who wants to be the initiate. nice writing.
Thank you Trell glad you enjoyed, and welcome to the sanctuary.


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Post by created2write » May 25th, 2012, 8:38 am

Coapachy wrote:Hi my friend. You are such a naughty girl....and I LOVE it! The sensual imagery has me melted, I was going to say melting, but I have already liquidised! As ever, you hold words and flow with such precision and seduction, it feels, like always, such an honour to read you. So bloody sexy may I add! Brilliant.

Dave
Liquidised huh? I like that Dave. Such a flattering response, and a great way to start my day. I am honored that you do read me and more that you enjoy. Thanks you and much love, V


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Post by ladymaybebaby » May 25th, 2012, 11:59 am

Instead of you had me at hello, you had me at " Engage me. " That was one beautiful piece! Such rich language, so descriptive, a beautiful write. I will be on the lookout for your posts! Can't wait to read more. Thank you honestly for sharing this gem! -LMB xoxo


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Re: Idyll

Post by matches » May 27th, 2012, 12:37 pm

Hey C2W,

'forever' like the Dawn,
is always too soon in its arrival;
when all we are left with
are the midnight sighs,
and memories of Passions kiss.

Excellent work here. excellent work indeed.


until...


"Adversity discourages only an inferior people..."

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Re: Idyll

Post by created2write » May 27th, 2012, 1:56 pm

matches wrote:Hey C2W,

'forever' like the Dawn,
is always too soon in its arrival;
when all we are left with
are the midnight sighs,
and memories of Passions kiss.

Excellent work here. excellent work indeed.


until...
I love it, I love it!


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