The Spring Within

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The Spring Within

Post by CarolynKleefeld » June 17th, 2014, 10:44 pm

The Spring Within

My spring within
grows new petals
unfamiliar to my soul,
garlanding my crown
with the buds borne
of the winter’s frown
and the passion of Eros.

And my third eye,
bejeweled and radiant,
gazes with infinite courage–
or is it reverence–
for the mercurial magic
that cannot be grasped,
for the bright lyrics of freedom
that invisibly sprouts my wings.

I continually yield
to the birthing of these buds,
pausing only to dissolve
again and again into
the mystery that breathes me
like a flower, unknown to itself,
erased by definitions,
which act like
a corset on my soul.

All is silently rich
as I sense a freedom
beyond the grasp of words



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Re: The Spring Within

Post by Balustrade » June 18th, 2014, 6:06 am

There is power hidden subtly in your tender words - an inspiration, amazement and a force pushing forward. It all comes from within and we must capitalize on it.


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Re: The Spring Within

Post by everhopeful » June 18th, 2014, 8:00 am

This is such a nice poem, I think Balustrade was spot on about there being power within a subtle and tender approach. Although the central images within the poem are concrete and easy to visualise, the metaphoric depth you've brought to them is what really makes the poem shine. The theme of renewal within a personal context makes this a really appealing and uplifting read.
A lovely piece of poetry, well penned.



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Re: The Spring Within

Post by CarolynKleefeld » June 18th, 2014, 2:18 pm

Balustrade wrote:There is power hidden subtly in your tender words - an inspiration, amazement and a force pushing forward. It all comes from within and we must capitalize on it.
Thank you so much for these thoughtful words, Balustrade!



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Re: The Spring Within

Post by CarolynKleefeld » June 18th, 2014, 2:20 pm

everhopeful wrote:This is such a nice poem, I think Balustrade was spot on about there being power within a subtle and tender approach. Although the central images within the poem are concrete and easy to visualise, the metaphoric depth you've brought to them is what really makes the poem shine. The theme of renewal within a personal context makes this a really appealing and uplifting read.
A lovely piece of poetry, well penned.
Oh, I'm so grateful for your kind comment. Your generous and thoughtful words are most appreciated!



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Re: The Spring Within

Post by Iron Fist » June 20th, 2014, 7:57 am

A corset on my soul, is such a beautiful turn of phrase, you speak of so much freedom and yet you are aching to burst out of the corset and experience so much more. Brilliant gentle but strong imagery throughout.



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Re: The Spring Within

Post by CarolynKleefeld » June 20th, 2014, 2:15 pm

Iron Fist wrote:A corset on my soul, is such a beautiful turn of phrase, you speak of so much freedom and yet you are aching to burst out of the corset and experience so much more. Brilliant gentle but strong imagery throughout.
Thank you so very much for these thoughtful words!



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Re: The Spring Within

Post by mangodog » June 20th, 2014, 2:55 pm


All is silently rich
as I sense a freedom
beyond the grasp of words


Carolyn - so true, so true.....yes i just love that -
"silently rich" phrase.....



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Re: The Spring Within

Post by CarolynKleefeld » June 20th, 2014, 3:00 pm

mangodog wrote:
All is silently rich
as I sense a freedom
beyond the grasp of words

Carolyn - so true, so true.....yes i just love that -
"silently rich" phrase.....
Drew
Thank you so very much, Drew!



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Re: The Spring Within

Post by Pride Ed » June 21st, 2014, 2:44 am

I love how this poem progresses. There is a sort of awakening here, and I mean that in a pure, new age sense. Every line unfolded into something different, and more vibrant,-- evolved, both mentally and physically.

Great poem!
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Re: The Spring Within

Post by Ladywildalice » June 24th, 2014, 9:37 am

Life is miraculous, as your most wonderful write confirms. If we are at all honest with ourselves, we should be truly amazed at the many gifts we are blessed with, and the way our souls grow, change and morph, with each new offering. It is the fool who ignores all that is working in the background on his soul's behalf. It is the egomaniac that thinks he is totally responsible for everything good in his life. It is the idiot that thinks he has no affect on those around him, and subsequently on his own journey as well. Very nice and much enjoyed. Congratulations on the spotlight, it is most truly so very well deserved for this.


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Re: The Spring Within

Post by tangerinepie » June 24th, 2014, 12:50 pm

Just a brilliant poem that keeps echoing in my mind..The imagery staggers one senses with lush wording and insight.It is a great pleasure to read something that captures ones thoughts so intensely..Gorgeous spotlight choice..Tangie..


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Post by CarolynKleefeld » June 26th, 2014, 12:48 am

Oh thank you, thank you, thank you--so very much--you for these kind and generous words! I'm immensely grateful for these thoughtful, supportive, and heartwarming comments! It's such a joy to be a part of this creative community.



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Re: The Spring Within

Post by dornicks » June 26th, 2014, 3:58 pm

I've read you poem and the comments ,feeling each was well deserved for this work. A beautiful,thinking write. Congratulations on the spotlight,

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Re: The Spring Within

Post by CarolynKleefeld » June 27th, 2014, 12:51 am

dornicks wrote:I've read you poem and the comments ,feeling each was well deserved for this work. A beautiful,thinking write. Congratulations on the spotlight,
dornicks
Thank you so very much for your kind and thoughtful words, Dornicks! :happyy:



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