Wonderland

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Harika2016
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Wonderland

Post by Harika2016 » May 4th, 2014, 8:05 pm

Wonderland

Down, down...

insomnia plunges my constellation
ethereal reflections lost
after surviving ages upon pedestals
no longer an ornament
my thoughts transcend known realms
ghosts hush mistakes, haze futures,
but the lucifer hummingbirds grow impatient
shielding my feather crown
I run, run...
at last guilt disperses inside raindrops
lantern sky usurps my revival
freedom means rebel, duel, revere Nature,
walk human paths and collide
with prejudice, luck, virtue, with love
comprehend beauty's duplicity
fear not relapses of union
forever ride storms churning beneath
I see, see....
lightning crackles nightmares
gravity rules all bonds
promises tumble on velvet speech
moments may unlock hope but
abundant despair trips sense at dusk
yet dawn yearns so terribly to
dodge every whiplash malice throws,
raw vanity nurtures, sometimes
I rue, rue...
meld vermillion, ash, pearl into spires
impress your false integrity
bone purges camellia gardens
each winter, fear marvels at iridium gates
baking in dunes pleasant
but for that one crude crow
importune all you wish it snickers
talons purloin my cracked compass

...oh, where is my Wonderland?


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Re: Wonderland

Post by candlewitch » May 5th, 2014, 11:18 am

hello,

I most enjoyed these lines, as they stay with me:

I run, run...
at last guilt disperses inside raindrops
lantern sky usurps my revival
freedom means rebel, duel, revere Nature,
walk human paths and collide
with prejudice, luck, virtue, with love
comprehend beauty's duplicity
fear not relapses of union
forever ride storms churning beneath

this is a very handsome bit of writing...verbally stunning...deserves being read out loud!

always, Cat


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Re: Wonderland

Post by dwells » May 6th, 2014, 11:56 am

Holy smokes Harika - I had to read this a second time to make sure I didn't miss anything. "No longer an ornament in your feathered crown; with Lucifer hummingbirds attending" - very uniquely impressive imagery. If I haven't yet welcomed you to TPS, then welcome now! Dispersing guilt and not fearing the relapse of unions while promises tumble on velvet speech - magnificent lines all. Perhaps Wonderland is what we make of it,and I think I know that crude crow too, cheers!


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Re: Wonderland

Post by retroview » May 6th, 2014, 12:50 pm

Harika I must say welcome to TPS and wow wonderland is one amazing piece absolutely brilliant I could picture every line as I read them I must say this is one of the best pieces I've read on TPS thanks for sharing I hope to read more of you


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Re: Wonderland

Post by Harika2016 » May 10th, 2014, 9:08 pm

Thank you guys so much!!


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Re: Wonderland

Post by karrie » July 21st, 2014, 10:13 am

This really had me captivated. Such imagery that jumps out! Well done and congrats on the Spotlight! :smile:



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Re: Wonderland

Post by LorettaYoung » July 24th, 2014, 7:07 pm

Congratulations; this poem is ripe with symbolism, sound and method a dreamlike view into imagination. Thanks for posting this work. Loretta



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