Leave it Alone (Language)

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Colby
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Leave it Alone (Language)

Post by Colby » November 26th, 2013, 3:41 pm

it’s getting colder out there
or else it’s always been that way
you’ve got to get around and realize
you’ll have to stop blaming someday

the breaths that we share
are limited the more we speak
maybe you should just realize
you should stop talking to me

leave it alone
it’s all going nowhere anyways
let it drop. let it die.
you’ll have to stop blaming someday

open up your fragile eyes
and close those damn shattered windows
he’s only half a shattered man
and there’s only half of me

you’re gonna have to stop blaming
if you feel as if you should stay
he’s opening up for you to shut him down
and he doesn’t need what you want to say

leave it alone
you aren’t going nowhere anyways
let it drop. let it die.
you’ll have to stop blaming someday

there’s a kaleidoscope in all of us
that confuses what we see
destroy yours and realize
this whole time you should have blamed me



bandgeekfreak
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Re: Leave it Alone (Language)

Post by bandgeekfreak » November 26th, 2013, 11:52 pm

Wow, I like the style, very raw and powerful. Great piece.


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catsfat
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Re: Leave it Alone (Language)

Post by catsfat » November 27th, 2013, 11:17 am

I love the image of the kaleidoscope, makes you rethink the way you see life and the things that surround you daily. gorgeous write <3



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Re: Leave it Alone (Language)

Post by everhopeful » November 30th, 2013, 10:12 am

The ending was a great twist, and I didn't see it coming at all. I read the majority of the poem as the speaker telling someone not to communicate because of the offense they'd caused them, rather than the speaker being the guilty one who should be shunned.
The opening of the poem was suitably chilly, a really cold and stand-offish tone, before the intensity grew leading to the revelation in the conclusion.
Nicely done.



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Re: Leave it Alone (Language)

Post by Theymakeyouwait » April 28th, 2014, 6:58 pm

Original, how the piece ends with the blame going towards the author and the anger following suit. Kind of makes me think that the person who is blaming is blaming themselves for something someone else feels is their fault.



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