paradise

An archive containing past featured spotlight works, what we consider, some of the best works on TPS. Feel free to leave comments.
aoeclald
Regular Member
Regular Member
Posts: 497
Joined: March 14th, 2014, 1:24 am
Location: Denver, CO

paradise

Postby aoeclald » August 29th, 2016, 6:28 pm

i imagine
driving in reverse
while the earth spins
and i am here
in space and time
forever

so i stop
and i see the sun rise and
i see the sun set and
i see the starry sky
and i remember
i am small

so i let go
and watch fear
melt into the sea
above me and
around me

the plants breathe and
the oceans swell and
the mountains grow
fueled by our little fears
reminding us of paradise and
the significance of
being happy.

---


"If you want to view paradise, simply look around and view it."
rip Gene Wilder


ImageImage

Farkas
Regular Member
Regular Member
Posts: 777
Joined: January 3rd, 2014, 4:12 pm

Re: paradise

Postby Farkas » August 30th, 2016, 7:56 pm

Hi

Yes, the world is a beautiful place. It was given to us to make what ever we choose to make of it. So far, there has been some successes and some notable failures. What is important is that we recognize that the gears of time grind exceedingly small, all big things have a small beginnings.

Farkas :hat:



riversidepoet
Elite Member
Elite Member
Posts: 2345
Joined: January 15th, 2015, 4:30 pm
Location: Kentucky

Re: paradise

Postby riversidepoet » August 31st, 2016, 7:55 pm

yes we are just a small part of this big old world, but we do have our part, must make the most of it, there is work for all to do, thanks for sharing, may God bless


Image
ImageImage

dwells
Elite Member
Elite Member
Posts: 10560
Joined: August 19th, 2013, 9:04 pm
Location: South Florida, U.S.A.

Re: paradise

Postby dwells » September 1st, 2016, 9:34 pm

It is what we make of it, often as not, and poetically couched with a sure hand AC. Good to read you again and cheers! - Dan


Image
ImageImage Image

User avatar
IronHeart
Co-Administrator
Co-Administrator
Posts: 505
Joined: February 2nd, 2014, 6:17 pm
Contact:

Re: paradise

Postby IronHeart » September 4th, 2016, 11:04 pm

You've caught that feeling between grandiosity and insignificance. It's beautiful. I really enjoyed this, wouldn't change a thing.

-I.H.


One method to develop one's poetic ability is to read and critique another's poem.
So, remember to comment on other's works! At least 3 for every poem you post.
You get more out when you put more in.
\_(^-^)_/

Christopher11
Regular Member
Regular Member
Posts: 694
Joined: December 14th, 2013, 6:23 am

Re: paradise

Postby Christopher11 » September 8th, 2016, 9:12 am

Sounds like you put it in reverse with a heavy foot. Traveling backwards at the same pace the earth spins, can make things appear to stand still, and that can make us feel paralyzed by our monotonous daily tasks. But when the sunrises come from the west, we can find ourselves on a road that leads to innocence.

Very much enjoyed your beautiful words filled with passion!
David



User avatar
devil
Regular Member
Regular Member
Posts: 101
Joined: October 16th, 2012, 9:04 am
Location: Dubai

Re: paradise

Postby devil » September 8th, 2016, 9:59 am

Very much enjoyed. With all that is going on in the world, and our lives, it is important to take note of the beauty of life, the futility of it all, and just be.


I have found both freedom and safety in my madness; the freedom of loneliness and the safety from being understood, for those who understand us enslave something in us.

Image

User avatar
kryssi_nykki
Regular Member
Regular Member
Posts: 201
Joined: December 12th, 2013, 2:20 pm
Location: jamaica
Contact:

Re: paradise

Postby kryssi_nykki » March 6th, 2017, 8:02 pm

This was so... nice to read. I mean that in exactly the warm and genuine feelings it brought up in me. It's not often stopping to consider your space in the universe and how truly small you are is a positive experience. A lot of the time it fills me with anxiety. Yet here, it seems good and necessary as well. Congrats on the spotlight :)


K_N

Image Image

aoeclald
Regular Member
Regular Member
Posts: 497
Joined: March 14th, 2014, 1:24 am
Location: Denver, CO

Re: paradise

Postby aoeclald » March 11th, 2017, 2:07 pm

Oh wow, I just realized I earned a spotlight for this! Thank you guys so much for your commentary, I really appreciate it.

Luke


ImageImage

User avatar
IronHeart
Co-Administrator
Co-Administrator
Posts: 505
Joined: February 2nd, 2014, 6:17 pm
Contact:

Re: paradise

Postby IronHeart » March 12th, 2017, 5:03 am

Well deserved :) congrats.


One method to develop one's poetic ability is to read and critique another's poem.
So, remember to comment on other's works! At least 3 for every poem you post.
You get more out when you put more in.
\_(^-^)_/


Return to “The Spotlight Hall Of Fame”

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 1 guest